It’s Romance Weekly Blog Hop time! 😀
If you’ve come from Fiona Riplee’s blog, then welcome! If not, why not check out her post?
This week we’ve been challenged with writing another flash fiction based on this GIF: http://weheartit.com/entry/101884590
So here’s my attempt! (I combined this with another writing exercise, where it was a challenge not to use any names. Hope you enjoy it. It came out at 364, instead of 300. I really need to practice hitting word counts on flash fiction 😀 ).
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Sunlight, which once offered a warm embrace, beat down upon them like the fires of a volcano as they stood in the graveled courtyard together. There was a heavy silence, filled with unspoken words that battered against them as hot as the heat of the sun.
“My car will be here soon.” She kept her gaze cast on the ground.
He said nothing in reply, but a small furrow appeared between his thick brows, strands of black hair falling into his eyes.
She shouldn’t have been surprised by the lack of response, but deep down it hurt her to receive nothing.
The gravel crunched beneath the tyres of the gleaming Mercedes, the engine purring as it drew to a stop.
She glanced up at him, his gaze averted from hers. “Goodbye.”
She moved to take a step away, but he gripped her arm. Still he said nothing.
When his thumb raised to her lips, her breath stuttered. A simple, gentle touch that was more intimate than anything she’d experienced before and sent a shiver coursing through her.
His face was only inches from hers, his breath whispering over her skin. For a long moment his lips danced on the edge of touching hers, his thumb still pressed against her bottom lip, parting her mouth slightly.
Her heart beat so fast she thought it would rip from her chest, but she stood unmoving, waiting.
His lips were like wings against her own as they teased at the edges of a kiss she was desperate to receive.
The car beeped its horn, startling him out of the moment which had caught them. His eyes widened, realising his actions and he took a wide step back.
It was as though he took the air from her lungs, her throat tight at his dismissive action.
She bit her lip, half to stop from crying and half to capture the teasing feel of his lips upon hers.
She turned away.
“I would have given you everything.” He talked so rarely, she almost didn’t recognise his voice.
She glanced over her shoulder, a sad smile dulling her eyes. “I didn’t want everything,” she whispered. “I only wanted you.”
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Another fun challenge! Think I’m definitely going to have to attempt more flash fiction in the future 😀
Now why not check out the very talented S.C.Mitchell, author of Son of Thunder, and see what he’s written for this challenge!
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Progress Report:
Status of fifth manuscript: Editing. (Nearly there!)
Books read: 2/4
Mid September book review: Written and ready.
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Nicely done. Very visual and present. Thanks!
Glad you enjoyed it 😀 I’m not the best at compacting down my writing, but it was great writing practice!
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂
Very clever.You’d expect she was the one with everything to give when she has a Mercedes collecting her, though I’m sure no chauffeur would sound the horn. Instead there she is walking out on him………..
xxx Massive Hugs xxx
Glad you enjoyed it! 😀 Yeah, I don’t think a chauffeur would ever be that bold!
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂
This is lovely Mishka, so beautifully written. I felt the pain of the characters and I’m intrigued by them, I want to know more of their story!
If you could let me know how I might be able to join in with Romance Weekly, that would be great. I may not be able to do it every week, but it sounds like an interesting challenge. 🙂
I’m really glad you enjoyed it. It was a little more sad then I meant it to be, but you know how it is when you start writing something and it goes completely different then how you imagined 😀
Of course I will, I meant to tell you about it in the email I sent! I’m having one of those days, I think!
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂 I’ll give you an email now.
Yay! Thank you. 🙂 And I know what you mean by one of those days – we all have them now and then!
Oh, so bittersweet. Loved it.
Thank you so much 😀 Glad you liked it. Always good to try out something different.
Wow- that had be holding my breath until he kissed her. Awesome job!
Thank you so much 😀 I was trying something a bit different on this one and was pleased how it came out!
Great job, so sad
Thank you so much!
The flash fiction challenges have really got me thinking about trying out different writing styles, it’s great! 😀
His breath whispering over her skin… nice! Love the twist on words at the end!
Glad you enjoyed it 😀 It’s hard trying to find the necessary words when writing flash fiction as I have to cut out so much for the word count. Certainly makes me think more about the words I use!
Thank you so much for commenting 🙂
Loved the tension you created between them, Mishka. Nice.
Thank you so much 😀 Was trying to create a sense of tension, so it’s good it came out that way!
You’re really good at describing a moment–a feeling that characters have in specific situations. While I was reading the piece, I felt I was in their world, completely immersed. The ending is especially powerful with the statement, “I didn’t want everything…I only wanted you.”
I’m really glad you liked it! And thank you so much for the compliment, it’s good to know what people like about my writing as it helps me improve! I still struggle with short pieces and flash fiction, but I am enjoying the practice 😀
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂
This was so sad, but I loved it. Great job!!!
Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it 😀
There is so much emotion with so little words spoken between the characters. I was pulled into the story immediately.
Glad you liked it, really like to try out different writing styles and flash fiction seems the perfect time to give it a go! 😀
That was amazing. Thanks so much for sharing.
Glad you enjoyed it 😀
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂
tugging my heart strings mishka!
I like to try my hand at emotional pieces when I can! 😀
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂 Off to read everyone else’s now!
I literally just said “oh my god” out loud at that last line. Beautiful, beautiful work!
Thank you so much! 😀 I like when the endings can add a powerful, emotional punch on the end!
Whoa, that scene backed a powerful punch. Beautifully written, Mishka 🙂
Thank you so much! A real compliment coming from you, always love your short stuff 😀
Very good job at describing the senses experienced there. Was easy to put oneself behind her mind.
That’s an interestingly open gif as well. Suppose that’s what makes it so effective for these blog hops. I think I’d have come up with something completely different were I to write a piece based on it.
It was pretty amazing how many people came up with such varying pieces based on that one GIF, shows how individual everyone’s imagination can be! 😀
Maybe you should write a piece for it yourself! I haven’t read much of your writing lately, and I’ve missed that.
Nobody has, lately. Well, except for various corporate and government goons, but those don’t count.
I would give it a try, but the fine art of romance is a bit lost on me, I’m afraid. I’d try to write something full of passion and longing and emotion, then end up with our heroine having to rush to save her love interest after some wicked space warlord trapped him in the center of the sun, and wonder how I got there in only 300 words.
That actually sounds like a pretty awesome plot! 😀